Critique of Story in a Box:

Student Review of Story in a box:

 
The class was given the task to write a story about thirteen mystery items from around the world. Then each student was to read everybody’s in the class's stories and rate them 1-10, and the 2 worst stories did not receive a rating.

 
The story I chose to rate worst was mainly a lack of creativity. The author simply stated she was at a museum and listed the objects and described them. For example (1) "There are the collection of coins set, American canoe, Chinese stamp and colorful plates.” The author also used two different fonts with in the story, and the first font was not the most pleasant to read in my opinion. This author also did not make sure that words were on the same line. The story also had a few grammatical errors, for example (2) “Some pictures on it, however, if we observe the stamp carefully, we will find two words on the bottle. I don't know the meaning of the word”.  The author says there are words on the bottle (plural) but then uses word later in the sentence (singular). At times words were on two separate lines and not put together. Lastly the title of the blog post was not Story in a Box; it was called “Unforgettable Visit”.

 

The story that I found the best in the class was creative and interesting. The author used the thirteen items in a unique fashion and connected the items together. The author did not just list them. The story was easy to follow and flowed together quite well. The author used the objects in a more abstract way of thinking and not only used them as what they actually are. For example (3) the author used the canoe not only as a boat “They tried to avoid a canoe that fell off a truck that was in front of them and ended up in the bush.” The author also had correct grammar and spelling.

 
1.      http://xianpingen191f12s28.blogspot.com/, September 4, 2012
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3.      http://en191f12s28jonaou.blogspot.com/, September 4, 2012